Thursday, November 15, 2007

ReX mY DiArY

Dear, Rex

Today is a fun day for me. In English I learned how to write a paragraph. I wrote all the things that I wrote in the graphic organizer or in the box. In the box I just wrote a few things and there are no details. When I read it again it is a trash! There are no details at all! So I make it correct. I just put more details and it became longer. But some grammar are not correct and it is not finish because Mr. Perico told us that we should exchange our writing notebook. I exchange with Nael. When I receive Nael book I read it and give two stars and a wish. The good points about his work is he includes many details and he have correct grammar. Nael just wrote a wish and the wish is you need to improve your neatness he said that because my work is a jerk.

Hey! Rex I need to eat first so see you tomorrow.

1 comment:

pierre_pineda said...

I'm glad that you are including good details in your blog posts. I'm also very happy to see that you are so reflective in your writing. First, you remember details of what you've learnt and it shows that you undertsand what's happening in class. Second, you observe everything that's happening like Nael's comments. Although he gave you an incomplete comment, I believe that you can still improve some parts of your writing which you think needs improvement. You are developing to become a great writer so keep up the wonderful effort. I'm looking forward to reading your blog posts because it is very entertaining. It looks like you are telling a story to me personally. It's a great way of expressing yourself. I wish to see more details in other subjects and the profiles and attitudes that you have developed so far. Cheers!